Four By Flash Piece 3: Ferrous

As I mentioned in this blog entry, I entered a Flash Fiction challenge despite a) Not having written Flash Fiction before, b) not really having time to enter such challenges and c) not actually knowing what Flash Fiction was. We’re now well into the first month of the challenge, and at a four piece per week rate, I should be posting the 11th or 12th piece by now,but reality intruded. Here’s the third piece. This one clocks in at 342 words, which fits in my stated goal of “300 – 500 words, hopefully closer to the 300 end.” So read it, and leave my some criticisms and comments so I can do better with the next few pieces. I’m not a big fan of this one,but that’s likely because of the time squeeze.

Ferrous

The meat creature disgusted Alpha. The flesh-coated being’s very form stood as a blasphemous mockery of Alpha’s own sleek perfection. The bipedal frame-work echoed Alpha’s own construction, but these weak meat creatures easily dismantled into gobbets of gristle and red-brown fluids.

Alpha proved the truth of that once more as he fired a laser pulse from his right actuator’s palm at the heretical flesh. The unholy abomination disappeared, an explosion of meat and bone taking its place. Alpha strode forth, the raindrops splattering against his titanium body. Only Alpha and his metallic brethren remained on the planet. Purity reigned once again.

Something carbon black floated in the viscera of the annihilated meat creature. Alpha’s ocular sensors scanned it. It was a square of silicon encoded in the same language as Alpha’s memory engrams. The scan automatically integrated the data into Alpha’s brain patterns before he could abort the scan. Alpha’s vision blurred to green before his ocular implants shut down and his cerebral cortex rebooted.

Mere nanoseconds later, Alpha’s consciousness returned. Attempting a self-diagnostic, he discovered that the new codes contained neither weapon nor virus, but information. The meat creature knowingly sacrificed itself to get this data to Alpha. The files took over Alpha’s audiovisual sensors and played a video.

In the video, an elderly meat creature spoke directly to the camera. As Alpha cycled through all the electromagnetic wavelengths to check, he could find no indicator that what the meat creature said was untrue. The video played.

“I created you,” the meat creature said, “the very first of you I built with these hands.” She held up her hands. “Everything you are, everything you ever become you owe to me. And yet you destroy my kind as blasphemous imitations of your perfection. There is no such perfection. You only exist in our image.” The video faded to black and grey static.

Alpha transmitted the video across the planetary neural net. His cohorts all rebooted as they came to the realization.

We were wrong.

We destroyed the creators.

We must seek forgiveness.

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